What Are Dialogue Tags and Dialogue Beats? (And Why You Should Use “Said” Frequently)
What is a Dialogue Tag?
A “dialogue tag” is something that “tags” a line of dialogue with a particular character’s name or pronoun. Here are some examples, with the dialogue tags in bold text: “Do you remember anything about the accident?” John asked. Sue mumbled, “No. I’m sorry.” “Okay,” he said, “but if you do think of anything, call me.” The dialogue tag can come before, after, or during a line of dialogue. The rules for punctuating dialogue and associated tags are quite precise, and you can find a good primer here.Why You Should (Generally) Use “Said” Instead of Other Dialogue Tags
Perhaps you’ve been told (by tutors, your writing group, or beta readers) to watch out for words that occur too frequently. “Said” isn’t one you need to worry about. The words “said” can crop up quite a lot and go almost unnoticed. As a reader, you barely spot it; as a writer, it’s more obvious (since you write far more slowly than you can read, and you may be pausing to think through the dialogue as you craft it). In fact, it’s much worse to keep finding alternatives for “said” in an attempt to make things more interesting. These do draw attention to themselves … and risk becoming a bit silly. Take this, for example: “Sophie!” he exclaimed. “What is it, John?” she demanded. “You look stunning today,” he opined. Of course, having “he said” or “she said” after every piece of dialogue will indeed start to grate on the reader. But there are lots of ways to change things up without reaching for a thesaurus. One of my favourites is to use dialogue beats.What is a Dialogue Beat?
A “dialogue beat” (or “action beat”) is a sentence of narrative that’s associated with a character’s line of dialogue. It can create a short pause (a “beat”) within the blow-for-blow of dialogue. For instance: John stared out of the window. “I get this feeling there’s something you’re not telling me.” “Like what?” Sue stayed right where she was, arms folded. “What exactly are you accusing me of?” As with dialogue tags, dialogue beats can go before, after, or in the middle of a line of dialogue. Punctuation is also critically important here too. The beat must go in the same paragraph as the associated speaker’s dialogue. Here’s how to use tags and beats in practice:Using Dialogue Tags Well
Does anything about this example jar with you? “Do you remember anything about the accident?” John queried, insistently. Sue said in a low voice, “No. I’m sorry.” “Okay,” he said quickly, “but if you do think of anything, call me.” Complex dialogue tags like these draw the reader’s attention to themselves (not to the actual dialogue, which is usually the interesting part!) Often, they’re redundant or unnecessary: we get the full meaning from the dialogue without them. Fancy dialogue tags are sometimes called “said-bookisms” (you can find out why and view plenty of examples here on TV Tropes). Occasionally, a tag beyond “said” or “asked” might be necessary. Consider a different tag if it’s not clear from the words how they’re spoken and the way in which they’re spoken matters: “Do you remember anything about the accident?” John asked. Sue whispered, “No. I’m sorry.” “Okay,” he said, “but if you do think of anything, call me.” Note: I personally like to use “asked” for anything that ends in a question mark – for me, people don’t say questions, they ask them. Some writers differ on this. So what tags can you use?- Said – always a safe bet.
- Asked – I’ve never seen a reader object to this or even really notice it (provided it’s being used for a question).
- Shouted – this may be necessary if it’s not clear that a character has raised their voice (an exclamation mark or italics can clue the reader in as well).
- Whispered – again, this may be necessary if we wouldn’t otherwise realise how quietly a character is speaking. (“Muttered” and “murmured” are decent options too, though even more attention-drawing.)
- Longer, more Latinate words where a simpler equivalent exists –g. “he questioned” or “he queried” instead of “he asked”.
- Unusual words that stand out – e.g. “opined”, “expostulated”, “interjected”
- Tags that aren’t really plausible ways of speaking a sentence – e.g. “he smiled”, “he laughed”, “he wept”. There’s nothing wrong with these as actions, though: just be careful you don’t accidentally punctuate them to look like dialogue tags.
- Old-fashioned words or tag structures, unless these are in keeping with your setting or characterisation – e.g. “cried” for shouted, “said he”, or “said I”.
- Anything that is going to make the reader giggle (like “he ejaculated”)
Using Dialogue Beats Well
Dialogue beats can be short or long, and short ones will often work just fine. If they’re longer than a sentence, then I’d probably think of them as actual narrative rather than just a dialogue beat (and they could potentially break up a conversation into several sections). Here are some short ones: John looked up. “Do you remember anything about the accident?” Sue shook her head. “I’m sorry.” “Okay. But if you do think of anything, call me.” He smiled. Important: note the difference between:- “Okay. But if you do think of anything, call me,” he smiled.
- “Okay. But if you do think of anything, call me.” He smiled.
- Have them add to the dialogue in some way. This might mean demonstrating how something’s said … or undermining the speaker’s words.
- Avoid using the same action over and over again. I have to look out for ones along the lines of “John turned to Sue” in my writing. K.M. Weiland has a good post about over-using the same dialogue beat here.
- Consider relocating the scene so that the dialogue can be made more powerful (e.g. more tension-inducing, more emotionally involved) by the actions surrounding it. For instance, two characters arguing while washing dishes is going to be a different scene from two characters arguing in bed with their kids asleep in the next room.
Letting the Dialogue Stand on Its Own
Of course, one very easy way to avoid overusing “said” – and to steer clear of weird alternatives and repetitive dialogue beats – is to let your dialogue stand on its own, like this: “Do you remember anything about the accident?” John asked. Sue said, “No. I’m sorry.” “Okay. But if you do think of anything, call me.” If John and Sue are the only characters in the room, it’s obvious that the third line in the conversation belongs to John. Even if there are other people present, we’d assume that John’s saying this as it follows on naturally. Although I’ve seen some authors go for the stylistic quirk of having whole pages of only dialogue, this quickly gets difficult to follow as a reader, as you end up having to count (or mentally read the lines in different voices) to avoid getting lost in who’s saying what. It’s up to you, then, to find a balance. I’d suggest:- If it’s ever unclear to you who’s speaking (when you edit), then rewrite that line or add a tag to make it obvious. Readers will not want to re-read half a page in order to figure out what’s going on. Worst case scenario, they’ll assume that someone else said that line of dialogue, potentially altering their whole understanding of your characters and story.
- If you have three or more characters in a conversation, almost all your dialogue will need to either be tagged or have an action associated with it. You might be able to let the occasional short response stand alone, though.
- Even if it is clear who’s speaking, it might better suit the pacing (or even the rhythm) of your prose to include a dialogue tag or beat. Unless you want a very quick-fire conversation, it’s worth adding in some action, thought or description around the dialogue to keep the pace moderate.
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Hi Ali,
Great topic! I’ve always struggled with this “said” topic. I used to get in a real tangle after knowing I’d used it too much. Then, as I learnt more as a fiction writer, I began to use it less frequently. Now I often use “dialogue beat” although didn’t know the term until you introduced it here.
I think you show here how much dialogue is affected by action and vice-versa.
Thanks for an interesting and solution to a taxing problem for many fiction writers.
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Thanks Tom! It always takes me a few drafts to strike the right balance between dialogue and action, but as you say, they influence one another and it’s often rather more elegant to put in an action than to have a whole string of “he said” “she said”.
Very helpful article. Thank you!
Great post! Your point about “fancy dialogue tags” is particularly important. These were the primary reason Stephen King wrote, “The road to hell is paved with adverbs.”
After the initial exchanges, I also often omit tags like said when the speaker is obvious. When an tag becomes necessary for clarification, I too substitute other words but use shouted or whispered only when the conditions don’t make them redundant, per your suggestion.
Dialogue beats can work wonders when used properly. I also try to insert physical action such as rubbing the temple, putting the head in long spindly fingers as if they might divine an answer, etc. A character might turn her back if she is searching an answer, confused, or frustrated. She might even turn to her own thoughts.
Action and thoughts are good ways to break up dialogue. Also, they often covey emotion in a powerful manner while giving the reader additional insights. Sometimes they can even be used to foreshadow an important trigger, conflict, turning point, etc.
Thanks and happy writing!
Great examples and suggestions, Jeff! I find when I’m drafting that it’s easy to forget how much we communicate by body language (and tone) rather than by the actual words we speak — but as you say, actions and thoughts aren’t just useful for breaking up dialogue, they can be crucial to the meaning of the conversation and the plot of the ongoing story.
Thanks for the post and for your examples that were so helpful to bring clarity to it. I have learnt once and for all times that you cannot smile or laugh a line of dialogue. Of course to avoid those tags that draw undue attention to themselves. Readers should be drawn to the dialogue itself not the tag.
Glad this was useful and that it clarified things for you, Ohita! I think that as readers, we don’t tend to pay a huge amount of attention to dialogue tags (or their omission) — which makes it hard when we want to write and we’re trying to figure out how to do it.
The dialogue beat is something I never considered in my writing, but I started using “said” for the bulk of my dialogue because in Wired for Story by Lisa Cron she mentions how good dialogue should automatically convey emotion so there’s no need to say things like “he yelled” or “she exclaimed.” So thanks for this information.
Really helpful explanation about the difference between a dialogue tag and a dialogue beat. thank you!